Lilly no, you don't have to do this! I heard Amber's words ringing in my ears. I took a deep breath and opened the lock on the Glass velvet lined case. I had been given this mission by the Owl King, Get the Akaroa diamond and bring it back to me and I´ll let them go The Owl King had told me. I felt the Velvet, the material felt like silk beneath my fingers covering them in dust. Why did I have to do this? I asked myself. I quickly changed the diamond for a fake one and jumped out the window with the diamond feeling really ashamed.
What an amazing image you invoke when naming a 'glass velvet lined case.' What a pity you did not have more words to expand on your story. Do you ever imagine expanding these great ideas into longer stories.
ReplyDeleteI look forward to your next blog post.
Hi Mr Robertson,
DeleteYes I am thinking of combining all of my stories. It is a shame that I don't have anymore words to write with. What's the point of getting us to write a story if we only have so many words?
Thanks!
~Hannah
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ReplyDeleteHi Hannah,
ReplyDeleteAmazing story! I really like some of the words you have used. Have you ever thought about putting these on Storybird? Great story Hannah!
Looking forward to more posts!
Prudence
Yaldhurst Model School, Christchurch
Hey Hannah!I
ReplyDeleteI like how you have put a question in there to make people reply! What does 100WC stand for? I think it is I felt the velvet, the material felt like silk beneath my fingers covering them in dust? Overall it was great!
Kind Regards
Noah
Hi Noah,
DeleteThanks for your feedback! 100WC stands for ¨100 word challenge¨, the challenge is that we are not allowed over 100 words in our story. Yes you are right!
From Hannah
Hi Noah,
DeleteThanks for your feedback! 100WC stands for ¨100 word challenge¨, the challenge is that we are not allowed over 100 words in our story. Yes you are right!
From Hannah